Head-hop

Editors are very sensitive to POV slips; many consider it the mark of an amateur. So be careful to maintain your point of view; don't head-hop from character to character.

Here we head-hop from Madison to Betsey, as signaled by the text abruptly naming Madison “that bitch.” Both the hop and the term feel harshly out of tune with the preceding action. As a reader, I have barely started getting to know Madison as a character and investing in her as the protagonist; should I now make a similar investment in Betsey? Only time will tell: If we return to Betsey's POV, then yes, I should pay close attention to her.